[Lucuss]

Hmm I thought this was alright... I could follow the structure but wasn't overly impressed by the flow thought that if there was a beat there would have to be a contradiction in the speed of the lines being spat in order to fit it all in on the beat... I also thought that the vocabulary, imagery and ideas used were basic. This piece could be a lot better, you just have to try and approach it from a smarter, more intellectual basis. Anyway nice to see you putting up your work, keep practicing and improving, peace.