hook could use a better delivery & some effects to make it stand out... 1st verse had no emotion at all, reading was too obvious... flow was off, as far as content goes--dood is going in the right direction but he needs to work on executing a better scheme.. 2nd verse, same thing.. no emotion, no presence at all... syllable count is off... 3rd verse, better delivery than the other verses but emotion is still non existent... needs a better scheme... content could be a bit more creative...
overall, the lack of emotions made this sound boring & not believable... could be a decent track... keep at it
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