Ill Humour -vs- xXTormentXx (TOPICAL)

[Ill Humour]

y0 ok Topical battle line min and max is...

8 - 16 bars

due date is this friday Dec. 1st 2006

Topic: If I were a terrorist.

explain votes so keep it all well thought out

[†SaW†]

lol aight that should be a interestin topic lol.....checkin in

[†SaW†]

Topic: If I was a Terrorist....Couldn't wait till friday so here u go..Peep it~

..In isolation Ima reject soilder, stranded from U.S-Soil,
Twisted winds of fury, blindin my w"raps n Aluminum-Foil..
..9/11 was just a fluke n gasp, Tor can show real-terror,
Leavin little girls wounded, like can ya'll Feel-Sarah?..
..My name is Torment, da grim reaper of inflicted-pain,
..Burnin all christ lovers on Stake, wit da Wicked-slain..
Hearin of Bombs-Over-Bagdad, but no Outkast-song,
Just my lethal imprint, which da rockets outBlast-Gong..
..Kick in the presindent door, n am"Bush" da White-house,
Wit toxicated-gas, while i invade his daugther Tight-Blouse..
..Strip da innocent bare, n piss on the weak-democrats,
So i can uptake my throne, wit my Bleak-Lenofacts..
..Take back the German law, wit Nazi counter-strikes,
Cuz if this bitch-was-wide, i'll just Surround-her-spikes..
..My torture will reign, without water like Painful-Clouds,
Cuz these peasants ain't hot, just the Shameful-Mild..
..So da body count-is-early, da math never calcu"Late",
Hungry for fashion numbers, nah just a Style-u-ate/8..
..Omg how the innoncent flee, from da scene-of-fate,
wit pistols of beams, capturin all life wit Lean-of-Hate..
..Fear me, wit bones-shakin like uh Skeleton Earth-Quake,
Or my bloodHounds will inflict pain, within da Surf-Take..
..Therefore christ is my disease, which tor is Sick-Holy,
I am a terrorist, killin "Mankind" like da murder of Mick-Foley..Eazy

I did 12 bars....eh Good Luck

[Ill Humour]

Topic: If I were a terrorist...I couldn't wait either haha! I just started typing it!

Coerce perp holdin' with a hidden package,
I got a bomb I'm wrappin and it's made of plastic,
Non-water based so I dodge an orange alert,
Created explosives that don't involve a squirt,
Using compounds not bound to liquid states,
Lying unsound on aircrafts flying outta state,
But I'm the terrorist not from Baghdad with a rag top,
Just the rebel without a cause known to smash cops,
It's a uni-bomber McVeigh in vein on a plane,
Unison to the roster of Kevin Costner played 3000 miles away,
I'm about to detonate without reason to hesitate,
But first I order the dinner plate while I wait,
Chicken or beef but I got beef to fuck with,
I see civilians about to be flown to the public,
Never a dull moment in this no ones camera "shy",
Flights leaving LA on United's Airline,
Inconspicuous to the friendly skies,
Friendly fire, hey your face gets hit, with pies,
This implies, havoc and mayhem,
I can jack a plane without the help of 8 men,
Because this terrorist is all armed to the teeth,
I can tear a wrist down the stuartist arms til death she bleeds,
I grabbed my luggage and flee,
I'm in a rush for the plane to Sears that's about to leave,

12 bars as well better luck to you!

also first to 4 votes is a KO or who gets 5 votes takes win.

[Ill Humour]

Uppin' for votes!

[Amishstad]

Man this was a dope battle,
nice display of skill by both

Tormnet: Dope imagery throughout, kept the flow
consistant and thew in some nice wordplay. I real
nice read overall. Kept on topic, but i feel you got
soft in the end and didnt express yourself as well.


Murs: Dope imagery as well, flow was pretty
consistant. You didnt really throw in wordplay,
or some kina lyrical tip to it, so by comparison
I enjoyed torment's more. You stayed on topic
and really got the material understood.


Vote:Torment.
He utillized his limit more, had a lot to say
and said it well. Real close match though.
Stay up

[†SaW†]

Aight thanks for voting Amish..1-0 my way uppin

[G-Rated]

Good Drops

Torment stayed on topic throughout his entire drop...Nice wordplay & multies...His words painted a vivid picture; I could visually reference what he was saying...Very lyrical...

Ill stayed on topic with a drop that combined a more graphic, violatile approach...Word choice was nice, very descriptive as well...But lacked that indepth lyricism...



My Vote: Torment

[†SaW†]

Thanks for the vote....2-0 my way keep em comin uppin

[Illustration]

Whoa...I dont know how you guys vote..but uhhh..theres an easy winner here..

Torment - First off all..you did have SOME okay wordplay..but cmon man..did you make up your own multis..or did you juss try and string together words that rhymed? Cause honestly..some of them made NO sense..however..you stuck to the topic and there were some nice ideas..but I wanna see a topic get flipped...

Just my lethal imprint, which da rockets outBlast-Gong..
So i can uptake my throne, wit my Bleak-Lenofacts..
Cuz these peasants ain't hot, just the Shameful-Mild..
..So da body count-is-early, da math never calcu"Late",
Hungry for fashion numbers, nah just a Style-u-ate/8..
..Omg how the innoncent flee, from da scene-of-fate,
wit pistols of beams, capturin all life wit Lean-of-Hate..
..Fear me, wit bones-shakin like uh Skeleton Earth-Quake,
Or my bloodHounds will inflict pain, within da Surf-Take..

I don't quote these cause they were hot..I quote them cause they were either words TRYING to be multis..that made NO SENSE...Bleak Lenofacts? Lenofacts isnt even a world..n it makes no sense..as does Outblast gong?!? I mean..cmon man...

You didn't exactly portray 'Being a terrorist' as well...maybe describe an actual event instead of making it like a battle..cause the idea of a topical is to flip a topic or just get descriptive as hell and make a story of it...I dunno..

Ill Humour - I can see your no newb to the topicals..cause your verse was EVERYTHING a topical should be..you described a scenario (i.e. the whole airport/blowing up a plane) and stuck to it..and your description was 10 times more vivid...the beginnin' with the liquid bomb was real dope...not too many complaints expect the ending..ended kinda weak but no matter...

In the end...Torment..you NEED to step your topical game up son..I'm just being dead honest with you...stringing together multis like that just killed your verse..and half the lines made NO sense....and you didn't exactly stick to the topic..sure you TALKED about a terrorist..but Humour just went more in depth...

So vote = Ill Humour