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12-02-2006, 05:31 PM
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Wherewolves
 
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Scream Phoenix, AZ
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Rowe [VS] Sureloc Holmes
Fuck the house rules...
-Four to six bars (8 to 12 lines) Voting begins after last verse is dropped (duh..)...and continues for 3 days..Winner will be whoever has the most votes after those 3 days Votes MUST be broken down -Punches (originality of those punches..how hard they hit) -Metaphors -Multis -Creativity -Wordplay -Enjoyment Voters must break down their votes into at least THREE of those above categories...But breaking down into all categories would be appreciated Drop whenever after you check in...No due date, but dont take forever...Consider this my check in...I'll be droppin in a second... Good Luck Rowe
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12-02-2006, 06:57 PM
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Wherewolves
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He's livin poor, walked past and noticed the tent is his
And Rowe must be tryin to sprint a race...with those run on sentences Why he wanna battle? Rowe equipped with no paddle to stay righteous Maybe I should copy him to win, and write my verses like this! Maybe then I'd get respect...to nail him harder than a big toe bone And you'd think he was sliding lines, the way he call SkidRowe home! A hole in your boat, with your soul in your throat, have em Rowe slow Cuz you beating me is like thinking twice...that shit is a know know An absurd spray of wordplay...while the wack boats lay dead Rowe feeds cuz he listen to Britney Spears and that it was an (o)K-Fed! A jumbled mess, he lion like a jungle pest...couldnt look at $ if he see four Even though its his name spelled backwards...bitch dont want no e-wor! Good Luck... NOTE: Skid Row is a place in the LA area where a shit load of homeless people live...
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12-03-2006, 04:27 PM
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Wherewolves
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bump so Rowe see this
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12-04-2006, 01:28 AM
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Don
Join Date: Nov 2006
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Listen nigga..I ROCK DOMES...AS FAR AS GUNS? I GOT CHROME...IMA LEAVE HIS TOP BLOWN..SO ITS GON BE SOME THOUGHTS SHOWN!
MY RHYMES IS NOT PRONE TO LOSING, I'LL STOP HOLMES!! MY BARS REQUIRE 'KEYS' AND THEY'LL SURE-LOCK-HOLMES!!/SURELOC HOLMES!! IM MORE THAN JUST GOOD, IN FACT IM DEAD NICE!! CONTRACT KILLA NIGGA JUS GIMMIE THE HEAD PRICE! PUT THE INFARED DOTS TO YA BODY LIKE RED DICE IF I CATCH HIM IN MY-SPACE LIKE THE WEB SITES! THIS BATTLE IS OVER BEFORE YOURE EVEN SEEIN THE FIGHT!! BESIDES TAKING UP AIR..WHATS YOUR REASON FOR LIFE? IMA STOP HIM FROM SPEAKIN TONIGHT! CUZ ONLY TIME THIS NIGGA'S 'NICE' ON THE MIC IS WHEN HES BEIN POLITE!!!!! I AINT EVEN GOTTA SPRAY AT THIS NIGGA!! MATTER FACT, I DONT EVEN WANNA PLAY WIT THIS NIGGA!! IM FEELIN HUNGRY I THINK IM BOUT TO SLAY ON A NIGGA! LIKE PREDATORS AT CHURCH..YO IMA ABOUT TO PREY/PRAY ON THIS NIGGA! HE THINK HE HAS A SHOT BUT ITS JUST TIME THATS WASTED..SURELOC ONLY MAD CUZ HIS RHYMES IS BASIC! THIS WIN IS MINE! I TASTE IT!!! AND IMA BOUT TO OPEN UP LOC LIKE A COMBINATION! LOC IS BOUT TO CEASE TO SHINE!! AND LOSE ALL KINDS OF RESPECT WHEN HE SPEAKS HIS LINES! CUZ YOUNG ROWE IS A BEAST WITH RHYMES! AND ILL PUT LOCS BRAIN ON HIS LIPS SO HE CAN SPEAK HIS MIND!!!!...//Get that..?
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12-04-2006, 01:31 AM
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Wherewolves
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that combination line was nice lol...nice verse man...vote up
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12-04-2006, 09:54 AM
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Underboss
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: Cap City, VA still rep TX tha birthplace tho
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-Punches - Rowe
IM MORE THAN JUST GOOD, IN FACT IM DEAD NICE!! CONTRACT KILLA NIGGA JUS GIMMIE THE HEAD PRICE! PUT THE INFARED DOTS TO YA BODY LIKE RED DICE IF I CATCH HIM IN MY-SPACE LIKE THE WEB SITES! HE THINK HE HAS A SHOT BUT ITS JUST TIME THATS WASTED..SURELOC ONLY MAD CUZ HIS RHYMES IS BASIC! THIS WIN IS MINE! I TASTE IT!!! AND IMA BOUT TO OPEN UP LOC LIKE A COMBINATION! Loc i read yours over an over tryna find something that came close to those lines....but i never did -Metaphors - Loc yours seemed too forced, and in need of explanation -Multis- Rowe, i know his lines extended compared to Locs but its quality not -Creativity - i was close to sayin a tie...loc u tried but it just didnt come together like most of it could have...gotta go wit Rowe -Wordplay - Rowe used Loc's name in damn near every bar....tha name leaves u wide open to da same shit err battle loc... -Enjoyment - Rowe....setup and structure along wit tha fire content just made it more fun to read well....obv my final vote goes to Rowe....Rowe came nice, Loc didn't...nuff said |
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12-04-2006, 10:35 AM
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Join Date: Nov 2006
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Dope battle...and Doc...I appreciate your vote in my battle with South Up...may have been criticism but no biggy...
Sureloc - Not the typical fire verse I've expected from you this far..you first 4 lines were fuckin' insanity..then it seems like you fell off a cliff....your usually dope wordplay kinda hit a dead end..and that seemed to be the flaw of your verse.. Quote:
But its after this your verse fell apart...the 'Skidrowe' line didn't hit at all..the KFed line was decent..the 'know/know' line needed a little rewording..and that 'ewor' line was a decent nameplay..but kinda on the weak side... Rowe - Well..I can see you are a wordsmith with the nameplays..cause your verse was chalk full of them..but can I be honest with you? First..lose the red text..it makes reading your verses an eye sore..and #2...it almost seems you stretch 2 lines into 1 line..and in reality..you squeeze about 4 lines into 2 bars..kinda an unfair advantage..however..on the punchline tip...you brought straight HEAT...like I said..some of your nameplays were ill as fuck.. Quote:
The other lines didn't really have much of an effect..the 'nice/polite' concept has been flipped numerous times..and this was decent at best..the 'prey' conept was just too simple for me...and the 'speak his mind' punch needed rewording..and it woulda been dope as hell...not sure how to reword it..but thats what it needed... Punches : It was pretty much dead even...but Rowe's 'combination' line edged out Loc in this department.. Metas : Again..this was dead even..I'd give the edge to Loc cause he had a little more wit to his lines..but Rowe was damn close... Multis : Rowe had simplistic multis (i.e. website/headprice/reddice and a few others) whereas Loc's first 4 bars had some longer multis...in the end though..Rowe just packed more of them effectively in his verse... Creativity : Again..Rowe has the advantage..his nameplays were pretty dope..and Loc more or less used the 'red' personal against him..and that 'run on sentences' line was ill.. Wordplay : I was gonna vote dead even..but some of Rowe's were pretty dope..Loc didnt come with the usual fire I was expecting to see... Enjoyment : For once...I'm voting a tie..cause you both came dope here... In the end...Rowe edged this out with a few more punches and all in all..a pretty dope verse..but like I said..try to keep your text black..and maybe shorten your bars a bit..and Loc? You don't need to improve much at all son..just rethink or reword some of the concepts...thats the main flaw... Vote = Rowe Dope battle boys...
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12-04-2006, 11:04 AM
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Capo
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(Surloc Holmes)
He's livin poor, walked past and noticed the tent is his And Rowe must be tryin to sprint a race...with those run on sentences ^^ good concept, but u should of said sprint-a-jail, but ino its ok still Why he wanna battle? Rowe equipped with no paddle to stay righteous Maybe I should copy him to win, and write my verses like this! ^^ eh ok personal Maybe then I'd get respect...to nail him harder than a big toe bone And you'd think he was sliding lines, the way he call SkidRowe home! ^^ not that hard enuff to my eyes A hole in your boat, with your soul in your throat, have em Rowe slow Cuz you beating me is like thinking twice...that shit is a know know ^^ filler An absurd spray of wordplay...while the wack boats lay dead Rowe feeds cuz he listen to Britney Spears and that it was an (o)K-Fed! ^^ wow..this was a good bar, but not that hard A jumbled mess, he lion like a jungle pest...couldnt look at $ if he see four Even though its his name spelled backwards...bitch dont want no e-wor! ^^ last line was ok...ino 7.8/10 (Rowe) Listen nigga..I ROCK DOMES...AS FAR AS GUNS? I GOT CHROME...IMA LEAVE HIS TOP BLOWN..SO ITS GON BE SOME THOUGHTS SHOWN! ^^ ok not a good opener though MY RHYMES IS NOT PRONE TO LOSING, I'LL STOP HOLMES!! MY BARS REQUIRE 'KEYS' AND THEY'LL SURE-LOCK-HOLMES!!/SURELOC HOLMES!! ^^ ok...not much but ok IM MORE THAN JUST GOOD, IN FACT IM DEAD NICE!! CONTRACT KILLA NIGGA JUS GIMMIE THE HEAD PRICE! ^^ ok concept of the game hitman PUT THE INFARED DOTS TO YA BODY LIKE RED DICE IF I CATCH HIM IN MY-SPACE LIKE THE WEB SITES! ^^ good bar THIS BATTLE IS OVER BEFORE YOURE EVEN SEEIN THE FIGHT!! BESIDES TAKING UP AIR..WHATS YOUR REASON FOR LIFE? ^^ filler IMA STOP HIM FROM SPEAKIN TONIGHT! CUZ ONLY TIME THIS NIGGA'S 'NICE' ON THE MIC IS WHEN HES BEIN POLITE!!!!! ^^ another filler I AINT EVEN GOTTA SPRAY AT THIS NIGGA!! MATTER FACT, I DONT EVEN WANNA PLAY WIT THIS NIGGA!! IM FEELIN HUNGRY I THINK IM BOUT TO SLAY ON A NIGGA! LIKE PREDATORS AT CHURCH..YO IMA ABOUT TO PREY/PRAY ON THIS NIGGA! ^^ uh the pray line was ok, da rest was scrambled HE THINK HE HAS A SHOT BUT ITS JUST TIME THATS WASTED..SURELOC ONLY MAD CUZ HIS RHYMES IS BASIC! ^^ filllllllllllller THIS WIN IS MINE! I TASTE IT!!! AND IMA BOUT TO OPEN UP LOC LIKE A COMBINATION! ^^ best bar LOC IS BOUT TO CEASE TO SHINE!! AND LOSE ALL KINDS OF RESPECT WHEN HE SPEAKS HIS LINES! CUZ YOUNG ROWE IS A BEAST WITH RHYMES! AND ILL PUT LOCS BRAIN ON HIS LIPS SO HE CAN SPEAK HIS MIND!!!!...//Get that..?[/quote] ^^ eh ok closer 8.0/10 Flow:tie Personals:tie Punches: Rowe Multis: eh Wordplay:tie Creativity:Rowe had more Enjoyment:tie Overall: Rowe Surloc: your verse was ok, but wasn't that hard hittin to me and felt it could of been reworded with more in-depth creativity. You had good concepts but used it in the wrong tense. Rowe: you verse was ok. Only your better attempts of punches got you this win, however if you failed that task, then sur would of been on your heels much more. Good battle towards the both
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Don
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K-O...good battle loc.....
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