Kanye East vs. Anonymous

[Anonymous]

4 bars
no dickride
explain votes
3-0 KO
4-1 TKO

drop when i drop

for a second i thought you was that dude from roc-a-fella/
but i was wrong, your the dude who cocks-some-fellas/
lemme guess, your first album was The Preschool Drop-out/
stop-bout "your a sick rapper", cuz only the top-count/
your dumb ass couldn't even get you a late registration/
and say you did, you'd be out within a day for violating school regulations/
comparing you to me?/
that's like a jock sprinting against someone with obesity

drop..

[Kanye East]

ummm okay fat guy

I signed up for this battle to make you a offer b 4 I off yuh.So think twice b 4 u talk head because many niggas thought first and them niggas
dead.
Im nice with the shit put the tech to yuh head have yuh neck stretched out farther than peyton mannings man.
You talkin this shit like you been gettin. Im commin fresh out the bitch actin
crazy Like I just got outta prison.
So im commin nice on this for instance we boxing because the judges say I won by a Anonymous decision

[Anonymous]

votes...

[Kanye East]

yep votes. throw some ds on that bitch

[Rowe]

omg kanye...THIS is how MOST people structure their bars...take this as advice...not hate..

EXAMPLE:

JEEZY LIKE TO DRANK, JEEZY LIKE TO SMOKE//
JEEZY LIKE TO MIX ARM N HAMMER WIT HIS COKE//

NOTE:

You can also have rhymes INSIDE the line, but you STILL need to have the rhymes at the end.

EXAMPLE:

IM THE BEAST WITH THE CROWDED CLIP, WE DEEP WHEN WE PROWL THE STRIP//
TRUST ME I WANT MAD BEEF LIKE COWS THATS SICK!//

Notice the bold words. They rhyme..you can have inner rhymes AND outer rhymes but you need rhymes on the end of your lines otherwise its not going to sound right. I can see that you do have rhymes at the end where your periods are but its easier to read if you use the format as the examples.....your bars are structured way too sloppily you're going to lose votes on that aspect every time.

On that note...I'm going with anonymous...although I felt they were weak he attacked the hell out of your name...personals/punches always win the battle. As far as enjoyment he gets the vote as well...yours was too hard to read along. Structure goes to him too..you already know the deal on that. I do hope you take my advice man it'll only help you get better.

VOTE: ANONYMOUS

And another tip for the both of you..when making your bars..try to make the first line AND the second line have about the same amount of syllables...it makes it flow better..

[Kanye East]

what the fuck. God I always lose because of bar structure. Bull shit niggas

[Iverson_Fan]

Co sign with what Rowe said.
Kanye, you gotta have structure to it man, and it should rhyme at the end. Didnt have too many punches
Anonymous, good shit, not too bad, had some decent lines, you got him with the punches

Vote goes to Anonymous, but good shit to both of you.

[Rowe]

Originally Posted by Kanye East

what the fuck. God I always lose because of bar structure. Bull shit niggas

Well duke if niggas cant read your shit correctly then they wont vote for you lol its simple as that. To someone whos just reading through this you can barely tell that it has rhymes in it and thats just the truth.

[Iverson_Fan]

Originally Posted by Kanye East

what the fuck. God I always lose because of bar structure. Bull shit niggas

So change it, and its not the only reason you lost either, his was just better all around. Its really not that hard to have structure to your shit man, all you gotta do is press enter a couple times

[Kanye East]

I dont know iv fan. It 2 much shit