DEATH vs. Anonymous

[Anonymous]

4 bars
no d/r
explain votes or cats
3-0 KO
4-1 TKO
no feeding
DEATH drops first

[D|E|A|T|H]

i dont know what d/r is or "feeding" but here goes

i just got done with two other verses but these 4 bars ill spit real quik
this young blood's sixteen, damn he's still learnin to use his dick

anonymous is an adjective meaning not idendified or without a name
but you have to make a name for yourself if u want to make it in this game

all these clowns i smashem, call me the rookie of the year
i go faster then ya'll.. and im only in second gear

im narcissistic, that means i think im better then everyone else
Anon gets no play around here so just leave him on the shelf

[D|E|A|T|H]

anon no drop or what man?

[Anonymous]

dude, my calligraphy is perfection, your's straight whack/
you write like you sniffed a whole kilo of crack/
youse just a internet gangster, groupie dancer, named death/
you only killed your hampster, it was because of your breath/
no use of my m-e-t-h-o-d man, without it, your still in a gravel pit/
shit, i'll sew your asshole up and feed you concentrated laxatives/
here's a comparison, i'm dog shampoo, your a dirty flea/
i'll make your ass disappear easy.. like you where murphy lee/


votes

[Area51]

Neither battler was great but Death wins this, his punches hit harder, and he had an alright play off of Anons name...
Anons punches didnt hit hard at all... some were strait garbage..
no offence anon but you gotta up your game, like your first bar, its just so basic... no punch, nothing
try to work on incorporating punches into every bar..
if you want, pm me and ill show you something that can help you out....

vote-Death

[Born]

Originally Posted by Anonymous

dude, my calligraphy is perfection, your's straight whack/
you write like you sniffed a whole kilo of crack/
filler
youse just a internet gangster, groupie dancer, named death/
you only killed your hampster, it was because of your breath/
wtf
no use of my m-e-t-h-o-d man, without it, your still in a gravel pit/
shit, i'll sew your asshole up and feed you concentrated laxatives/
played
here's a comparison, i'm dog shampoo, your a dirty flea/
i'll make your ass disappear easy.. like you where murphy lee/
blah

votes

Originally Posted by D|E|A|T|H

i dont know what d/r is or "feeding" but here goes

i just got done with two other verses but these 4 bars ill spit real quik
this young blood's sixteen, damn he's still learnin to use his dick
haha
anonymous is an adjective meaning not idendified or without a name
but you have to make a name for yourself if u want to make it in this game
iight
all these clowns i smashem, call me the rookie of the year
i go faster then ya'll.. and im only in second gear
ehh
im narcissistic, that means i think im better then everyone else
Anon gets no play around here so just leave him on the shelf
not a strong closer

yall didnt really cum hard at all but death had a couple gud bars...his opening got me laffin...vote death

[G-Rated]

Originally Posted by DEATH's Breakdown

i just got done with two other verses but these 4 bars ill spit real quik
this young blood's sixteen, damn he's still learnin to use his dick
haha @ tha last line...Decent opener
anonymous is an adjective meaning not idendified or without a name
but you have to make a name for yourself if u want to make it in this game
uhh...Good concept, but weak follow through...Wording is too basic & why are you givin us definitions??
all these clowns i smashem, call me the rookie of the year
i go faster then ya'll.. and im only in second gear
NO!! Filler...
im narcissistic, that means i think im better then everyone else
Anon gets no play around here so just leave him on the shelf
Weak Closer...And stop with the definitions, this is where your creativity comes in, you should be able to create a concept that works around that idea without saying "that means"...

Originally Posted by Anonymous' Breakdown

dude, my calligraphy is perfection, your's straight whack/
you write like you sniffed a whole kilo of crack/
This is bad...You opened with a filler
youse just a internet gangster, groupie dancer, named death/
you only killed your hampster, it was because of your breath/
This was just too childish...Beyond weak
no use of my m-e-t-h-o-d man, without it, your still in a gravel pit/
shit, i'll sew your asshole up and feed you concentrated laxatives/
If your going to do a laxative concept then it needs to be hella creative...That concept is over-used & very much played...
here's a comparison, i'm dog shampoo, your a dirty flea/
i'll make your ass disappear easy.. like you where murphy lee/
NO...Weak closer...Filler...What are you thinking??

Its pretty clear this was weak on both sides...But death gets this one...

Keep elevatin...

My Vote: DEATH

[D|E|A|T|H]

KO props to anonymous and thanks all for the tips

[Tyme Lyne]

damn that was quick ......as a bytch