Ranked: HurricaneJ213 vs Snoopd

[HurricaneJ213]

8-10 bars (10 maximum)
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Originally Posted by HurricaneJ213 on 2.07.2007

Indiana Jones played by Hurricane J in this archaeological screenplay /
I excavate burial sites, "Hallelujah!" I exclaim when I kneel n' pray (kneel in prey) /

Originally Posted by snoopd on 2.11.2007

Poison you causin multiple diseases confusin the pathologist nursin’//
the only way you’ll be discovered is through an archaeologist excursion//

Don’t copy what I write my use of big words is tight
An orthodontist can fix your verbal over-bite

that medical bill would empty your family purses
better get insurance…rehearse my other 5 verses

Your dad shoulda pulled out but had the urge to persist
unbelievable…100,000 sperm…you were the fastest?

what’s more obscene, you’re like fourteen,
and your poor gene pool needs chlorine

I stand tall, you’re phony like a planned fall
you write like a dead hand’s scrawl…that means not at all

Feelin’ cocky? Best take your hand outta your pocket
my flow reaches outerspace, you can see how I rock it (rocket)

Ran from this Hurricane, but tripped and fell flat
child of invisible parents, you’re nothing to look at

Not a close margin of victory, voters agree I win by a mile
If you call me the loan (Lone) Ranger, you can borrow my style

Dig the aesthetic of my poetic anesthetic
Coincidence your mom doesn’t spit either…or genetic?

[In$anity]

iiiiiiiiight checkin in.

When you drop i'll edit this post and drop here bro aight? good luck man

EDIT : aiight posted i wrote it before but my internet wasn't working, back up now so here it is

My verse:

VERSE FOR HURRICANE

With my tech range I’m known to wreck frames//
Give you neck pains cos I got balls n i cock back like a sex change//

I’m known for leavin shots there in any place//
This emo needs to cut his wig before he gets a crosshair on his face//

you think you’re winning? Prolly turning blind//
I’ll light ya head up with my shots like I’m burnin ya mind//

Smash you up like lego so you can’t assemble ya pieces//
I’ll leave holes in ya body so ya look like resemblin’ swiss cheeses//

Watch yo mouth cos like a garage I’ll slammit shut
Wanna summin up? Ya the opposite of a penis cos you never cummin up//

This snitch gone tell cops n get filin’ on me
This gay bitch had his hair cut n washed, that’s the only way he stylin’ on me (god-damn)

To me you’re like a plate of nothin’//
So I’m plottin to put you in a state of coffin// (coughin) (haha)

always beggin a chooser//
Your views of a fare (fair) win involves payin tha looser//

[aksion]

Don’t copy what I write my use of big words is tight
An orthodontist can fix your verbal over-bite

that medical bill would empty your family purses
better get insurance…rehearse my other 5 verses

HAHAH from the beginning to the end hurricanes shit was on point.. flow and creativity was there the whole time not just one line.. the rock it (rocket) was nice and your closer was fire


snoopd-- ur flow was nice, creativity not on the same level as J.. opener and finisher werent as good as his



HURRICANE gmv

[In$anity]

^^^

Rules state every line must be broken down before vote counts....Break down so he gets his vote

an im not gettin sympathy votes but don't sleep on some of my punch lines...........

[aksion]

Don’t copy what I write my use of big words is tight
An orthodontist can fix your verbal over-bite
nice opener.. nice set up.. nice punch

that medical bill would empty your family purses
better get insurance…rehearse my other 5 verses
the first 2 bars are on point.. nice punch.. nice flip

Your dad shoulda pulled out but had the urge to persist
unbelievable…100,000 sperm…you were the fastest?
nice punch

what’s more obscene, you’re like fourteen,
and your poor gene pool needs chlorine
pool and chlorine nicee

I stand tall, you’re phony like a planned fall
you write like a dead hand’s scrawl…that means not at all


Feelin’ cocky? Best take your hand outta your pocket
my flow reaches outerspace, you can see how I rock it (rocket)
not sure about the first line but the 2nd had laugh a bit

Ran from this Hurricane, but tripped and fell flat
child of invisible parents, you’re nothing to look at
nahh

Not a close margin of victory, voters agree I win by a mile
If you call me the loan (Lone) Ranger, you can borrow my style
hahah

Dig the aesthetic of my poetic anesthetic
Coincidence your mom doesn’t spit either…or genetic?
nice finisher

flow was on point.. creativity was there and punches were excessive and personal.. nicee drop J




With my tech range I’m known to wreck frames//
Give you neck pains cos I got balls n i cock back like a sex change//\
booo this opener

I’m known for leavin shots there in any place//
This emo needs to cut his wig before he gets a crosshair on his face//
this emo? he's rappin kid.. weak punch

you think you’re winning? Prolly turning blind//
I’ll light ya head up with my shots like I’m burnin ya mind//
not feeling this.. not really personal

Smash you up like lego so you can’t assemble ya pieces//
I’ll leave holes in ya body so ya look like resemblin’ swiss cheeses//
nah

Watch yo mouth cos like a garage I’ll slammit shut
Wanna summin up? Ya the opposite of a penis cos you never cummin up//
haha no way snoopd not feeling this.. dont relate

This snitch gone tell cops n get filin’ on me
This gay bitch had his hair cut n washed, that’s the only way he stylin’ on me (god-damn)
is this a punch?

To me you’re like a plate of nothin’//
So I’m plottin to put you in a state of coffin// (coughin) (haha)
don't relate not even close to being funny

always beggin a chooser//
Your views of a fare (fair) win involves payin tha looser//
not feeling the closer.. not even a personal punch

snoopd- i dont mean to be an ass but just wasnt feeling your shit at all.. u shoulda flipped his shit or something.. anything




i didnt think i needed to break this down.. snoopd wasnt even on the same level as hurricane here.. J flipped his shit more and he went first, wtf is that about.. snoopds lines seemed like wordplay shit didnt relate where as hurricanes did.. so there i gave you what you wanted.. HURRICANE GMV

[Prycele$$]

Originally Posted by HurricaneJ213

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Don’t copy what I write my use of big words is tight
An orthodontist can fix your verbal over-bite
Not feelin the structure..

that medical bill would empty your family purses
better get insurance…rehearse my other 5 verses
iunt get this im sorry.. it doesnt make sense..

Your dad shoulda pulled out but had the urge to persist
unbelievable…100,000 sperm…you were the fastest?
lol good bar

what’s more obscene, you’re like fourteen,
and your poor gene pool needs chlorine
not feelin structure but i like the concept..

I stand tall, you’re phony like a planned fall
you write like a dead hand’s scrawl…that means not at all
hmm doesnt make sense.. the way u said it atleast.. i know where u comin from tho

Feelin’ cocky? Best take your hand outta your pocket
my flow reaches outerspace, you can see how I rock it (rocket)
couldve executed this better..

Ran from this Hurricane, but tripped and fell flat
child of invisible parents, you’re nothing to look at
feelin..

Not a close margin of victory, voters agree I win by a mile
If you call me the loan (Lone) Ranger, you can borrow my style
ok..

Dig the aesthetic of my poetic anesthetic
Coincidence your mom doesn’t spit either…or genetic?

good closer..

fuck it ill do snoopd's in the mornin or sumthin.. im tiiired..

[In$anity]

aiight well i'm not loosing this battle cos dumb shits cant get my verse. that wigga shouldn't be voting. he doesn't know what the fuck a punchline is.......get this:



1st bar: im sayin i've got balls......and literally as well, and i'd cock back (aim at you with a gun) but i'd also cock back like a sex change......metaphor shit. it's a dynamite punch

2nd ba) aiight, can't believe this got slept on. it's a metaphor again. about a CROSS HAIR......dangling from your head on your face, or the crosshair of a gun on your face........

3rd bar) dumb shits who don't get this one need to be gassed.

4th bar) swiss cheese has holes in it, think about it....

5th bar) and this was almost a BULLSHIT vote i got for this one. He said he aint feelin it cos he cant relate to it. you're not relating to my rhyme, you're marking it for meeting the categories of punchlines, wordplay, similies, flow and structure etc. talkin about him never 'comin up' as in getting better... like the opposite of a penis, how hard is that to understand?

6th bar) stylin' on me because of his hair cut.......not stylin on me cos he's a good rapper

7th bar) Wordplay. coughin/coffin. why did you miss that one mayn? damn.....

8th bar) more wordplay and a small punch


So i think that vote you did was bullshit. i broke my own shit down and have explained what the punches mean. please fecking read my shit before you vote because it's apparant that you are not on my level if you don't understand this. It's not that difficult........come on

UPPIN

[HurricaneJ213]

^you need to calm down

I got all your shit, you had some great stuff...but all that hair shit was fucking wack...we already know you would vote for yourself, theres no need for your breakdown

[aksion]

are you serious snoop... u aint even gangsta u wangsta.. i spit the straight truth holmes

snoopd i got your fucking metaphors and shit but its still not good imo.. and its a fuckin opinion learn from it dont bitch twat.. your punches arent personal its fucking wordplay like u saidd.. ill fucking wordplay all damn day if u want

u said the only way he styling wit u is if he get a haircut.. loll thats a hard punch right there..... plate of nothing/ coffin - punch is all word play and not 1% personall.. and again u said it urself your closer was a small punch... hurricanes made me laugh cause his rhymes/punchs tight your shit i was laughing at.. i have seen better from you but you need to see whats really in front ya eyez

[The Coldest]

im anot gonna break it down so i guess jus my two cents.... hurricane came correct, nice punches n great diction plus he came personal on the copyin even though i wouldn't call it biting....

snoopd came half hearted some of his lines were played or predictable n nothing reall great

So i would vote for hurricane but if it doesnt count it doesnt count