RANKED: Need Fo Weed Vs. YoungFlamez

[need fo weed]

rules: 1 verse, 5 bars
2 rounds
1st u, 2nd i start
not more then one week to post, as soon as the 1st one has the 2nd has to post within 24 hours
good luck

[need fo weed]

bump!!!!!!

[need fo weed]

hey homey where u at man?
okay since u aint gonna drop first i will start
droppin in 5 min

[need fo weed]

Hey, I read u r freestyle on tha open mic and it was shit
So y dontcha get in tha battle so I can teach ya lil bit

About tha game where niggaz tryna lirycally kill each other
And not juz 2 throw a threat in the air an then go whine at their mother (like u)

I mean, U wanted a battle, now I can give ya a war
But if u lose this be so kind and try not to act like a whore

Cause its not my fault that u tried to play a grown man’s game
U see, there’s three things that count: skills, reputation and fame

I bet now u understand, ur skills are not hot man, not even warm
U are an amateur director, best movie a home-made porn

Now ur whole freestyle was lyrical suicide cause nuttin was true
And that’s y the name flamez does not deserve U.

[youngflamez]

damn...forgot about this...

*checkin in*


Yo...

I'm the one that you don't wanna battle-wit-dog/
I'll shit on ya flow...
then i'll make you swallow-it-all//

I'm *opposite*-*war*/ (raw)
one of the best you probably-saw/
trill enough to pull ya fuckin spine right outta-ya-jaw//

home boy look you gotta be kiddin'-me/
what's the odds of you killin'-me?/
I spit a 16 and blow you to smithereens//

and..

As far as mother-jokes/
we can trade some-of-those/
Yo mom in my-video/
she the one touchin'-her-toes//
shakin' her butt-on-the-floor/
she makin' my fuckin'-dough/
You can't deny that my flow is hot
my name you fuckin.....know/ Hoe ( <----that's you)

Checkin' out...

mixtape comming soon also...real talk
The Young G.O.D.z
www.myspace.com/fodacommunity

We do it fo da community and you should too...

-FLaMEz

[ruivirtual]

Hey, I read u r freestyle on tha open mic and it was shit
So y dontcha get in tha battle so I can teach ya lil bit
eh.. no punch, no creativity, no wordplay, this can only take some points by the personal, i guess... not a good opener

About tha game where niggaz tryna lirycally kill each other
And not juz 2 throw a threat in the air an then go whine at their mother (like u)
is this a punch?! "whine at theyr mother"?? ...

I mean, U wanted a battle, now I can give ya a war
But if u lose this be so kind and try not to act like a whore
again.. simple plain verse, the 2nd line is bad worded...

Cause its not my fault that u tried to play a grown man’s game
U see, there’s three things that count: skills, reputation and fame
eh.. skillz OK rep HUMM OK, fame, NAH!! could have done better

I bet now u understand, ur skills are not hot man, not even warm
U are an amateur director, best movie a home-made porn
barely average

Now ur whole freestyle was lyrical suicide cause nuttin was true
And that’s y the name flamez does not deserve U.
your best line was this, even thou it isnt pretty punchy, the structure and flow was ok, somekind of name deal... ok closer


I'm the one that you don't wanna battle-wit-dog/
I'll shit on ya flow...
then i'll make you swallow-it-all//
this is a ok opener.. because of the imagery - the "make swallow" deal... but let's hope the rest of the drop gets better

I'm *opposite*-*war*/ (raw)
one of the best you probably-saw/
trill enough to pull ya fuckin spine right outta-ya-jaw//
Again, it seems a bunch of tuff talk to me but the last line is savin it..

home boy look you gotta be kiddin'-me/
what's the odds of you killin'-me?/
I spit a 16 and blow you to smithereens//
not feeling it anymore

and..

As far as mother-jokes/
we can trade some-of-those/
Yo mom in my-video/
she the one touchin'-her-toes//
started somewhat promissing but ended pretty poor

shakin' her butt-on-the-floor/
she makin' my fuckin'-dough/
You can't deny that my flow is hot
my name you fuckin.....know/ Hoe ( <----that's you)
what a bad closing!

shit homies i dunno if u'll get alot of niggaz to vote on this... u both need to elevate. imo yal just gotta pay more attention to:

creativity - both of you but specially NEEDforWEED, shit, yer drop was plain and predictable. YOUNG is da same but the "spinals throo da jaw" got him some points there

metas - shit, i dont think a lot of explainin is needed cause theyr simply wrent NO METAS IN UR DROPS.

multis - SAME AS ABOVE

wordplay - SAME AS THE PREVIOUS TWO

punches - specially for WEED - BUT FOR BOTH - try to make inteligent punches at ur oponents.. ur shit was soft as a grammas piece o cake

THAT'S MY WORD - this is my opinion, and obviously its a subjective jusdgement, but i think most of the people in here would agree with my words. But like i said im jus speakin MY OWN MIND.

if any of yall got and wanna battle me, just make a RANKED battle with the house rules, set a resonable amount of barz n i'll be ther

my vote : young flamez, coz even thou both were pretty poor, needFweed only got a average closer.

[youngflamez]

lol...'preciate the reply

it was basic but I felt it would be enough to win...

bumpin' fo more votes

FLaMEz 1-0

[Area51]

weed:
Hey, I read u r freestyle on tha open mic and it was shit
So y dontcha get in tha battle so I can teach ya lil bit
no punch
About tha game where niggaz tryna lirycally kill each other
And not juz 2 throw a threat in the air an then go whine at their mother (like u)
weak
I mean, U wanted a battle, now I can give ya a war
But if u lose this be so kind and try not to act like a whore
weak
Cause its not my fault that u tried to play a grown man’s game
U see, there’s three things that count: skills, reputation and fame
no punch
I bet now u understand, ur skills are not hot man, not even warm
U are an amateur director, best movie a home-made porn
weak
Now ur whole freestyle was lyrical suicide cause nuttin was true
And that’s y the name flamez does not deserve U.
weak

way too basic, work in some punchlines and get more creative

Flamez:
I'm the one that you don't wanna battle-wit-dog/
I'll shit on ya flow...
then i'll make you swallow-it-all//
decent...
I'm *opposite*-*war*/ (raw)
one of the best you probably-saw/
trill enough to pull ya fuckin spine right outta-ya-jaw//
nope
home boy look you gotta be kiddin'-me/
what's the odds of you killin'-me?/
I spit a 16 and blow you to smithereens//
nope
and..

As far as mother-jokes/
we can trade some-of-those/
Yo mom in my-video/
she the one touchin'-her-toes//
shakin' her butt-on-the-floor/
she makin' my fuckin'-dough/
You can't deny that my flow is hot
my name you fuckin.....know/ Hoe ( <----that's you)
all of this.. nope

both of you need serious elevation

ya gotta work on haiving more original punchlines instead of just making statements.. keep battling you'll get there

Flamez wins this cuz of his opener
v/ Flamez

[youngflamez]

chuich...preciate the vote..

2-0 my way


-FLaMEz

[need fo weed]

ok...r we goin 2 do the 2nd round?