Jah Wise vs. suffix

[Jah Wise]

ranked battle
no more than 12 lines
house rules
no feeding
due by midnight
up to you if u want it ranked or not

[suffix]

rank it .. id lyke my win

[Jah Wise]

ima drop in a lil

[Jah Wise]

how to begin?...even WITH my style, i doubt you will win
what i pen will make ya fuckin shadow jump out of its skin...
you dissin me? never that, my rep will overshadow you
cuz i'm the fuckin tank of gas you'll never hold a candle to...
i'm servin this...raw and grimy, straight poisonous form
i'm on fucking FIRE right now...you're approaching lukewarm
so you're torn at this point...my verse is a torturous ploy
and if you ever held my mic it'd make your shoulders disjoint
so don't disappoint, we all know you won't win in this fight
cuz i'ma psychic's best friend... bringing predictions to life
i rhyme away, my mind displays an endless fountain of punches
while you're breakin ya bank and it's still amountin to nothing

[Kinetik']

Originally Posted by Jah Wise

how to begin?...even WITH my style, i doubt you will win
what i pen will make ya fuckin shadow jump out of its skin...
you dissin me? never that, my rep will overshadow you
cuz i'm the fuckin tank of gas you'll never hold a candle to...
i'm servin this...raw and grimy, straight poisonous form
i'm on fucking FIRE right now...you're approaching lukewarm
so you're torn at this point...my verse is a torturous ploy
and if you ever held my mic it'd make your shoulders disjoint
so don't disappoint, we all know you won't win in this fight
cuz i'ma psychic's best friend... bringing predictions to life
i rhyme away, my mind displays an endless fountain of punches
while you're breakin ya bank and it's still amountin to nothing

ah dont hurt em jah...

[suffix]

this dudes a bitch, caught feelings n cried cuz his anthem
my wins expected, lyke this rich wyte boy drivin a phantom (he calls me rich wyte boi)
im ya slaughter house .. its kew so i crave for the beef
the # of letters in ya name is luck, but i leave 7 daized cuz ya weak (days/week)
the fuck does text prove? throw a mic on ya wish list
u rippin my presence is unlykly lyke a jewish boy on christmas (presents)
if u handin out beatins ill cripple ya whole rations
ull never beat me n this aint jus a bold statment
RGF vending machine .. watch as i serve jah for 50 cent
u gay stripper, u spent more tyme dancin wit biggies than diddy did (hard dicks lol)
lookin at ya verse nothins tyte, nope notta rhyme
w/e we do ya cant see me .. n it so happens its the bottum line

smh ..

[Jah Wise]

ok....
votes please

[Iverson_Fan]

Jah Wise...

how to begin?...even WITH my style, i doubt you will win
what i pen will make ya fuckin shadow jump out of its skin...
Decent opener
you dissin me? never that, my rep will overshadow you
cuz i'm the fuckin tank of gas you'll never hold a candle to...
Ehhh, just aiight
i'm servin this...raw and grimy, straight poisonous form
i'm on fucking FIRE right now...you're approaching lukewarm
LOL, nice
so you're torn at this point...my verse is a torturous ploy
and if you ever held my mic it'd make your shoulders disjoint
Hmmm, flow was off, aiight tho
so don't disappoint, we all know you won't win in this fight
cuz i'ma psychic's best friend... bringing predictions to life
Ok
i rhyme away, my mind displays an endless fountain of punches
while you're breakin ya bank and it's still amountin to nothing
Kinda weak closer

suffix...

this dudes a bitch, caught feelings n cried cuz his anthem
my wins expected, lyke this rich wyte boy drivin a phantom (he calls me rich wyte boi)
Ehhh
im ya slaughter house .. its kew so i crave for the beef
the # of letters in ya name is luck, but i leave 7 daized cuz ya weak (days/week)
I see where you goin...but didnt get there in my opinion
the fuck does text prove? throw a mic on ya wish list
u rippin my presence is unlykly lyke a jewish boy on christmas (presents)
Same as above, coulda been worded a little better
if u handin out beatins ill cripple ya whole rations
ull never beat me n this aint jus a bold statment
LOL nice, I liked that one
RGF vending machine .. watch as i serve jah for 50 cent
u gay stripper, u spent more tyme dancin wit biggies than diddy did (hard dicks lol)
Weak wordplay
lookin at ya verse nothins tyte, nope notta rhyme
w/e we do ya cant see me .. n it so happens its the bottum line
LOL, nice closer

suffix...you have some NICE ideas, just need to work on gettin em out clearer. The wording is off on some of em, but you got some dope concepts. Jah, you came aiight on this one, nothin too hard hittin tho...damn this was tougher than I thought...I think cause of the bold statement and bottom line Ima give it to suffix...but you gotta work on wordin your shit better, good shit to both yall tho...

My Vote - suffix

[ruivirtual]

how to begin?...even WITH my style, i doubt you will win
what i pen will make ya fuckin shadow jump out of its skin...
heh.. not a great opener
you dissin me? never that, my rep will overshadow you
cuz i'm the fuckin tank of gas you'll never hold a candle to...
i liked the concept, good imagery deal, but it didnt came out worded well enough
i'm servin this...raw and grimy, straight poisonous form
i'm on fucking FIRE right now...you're approaching lukewarm
aight, i didnt feel it dat much
so you're torn at this point...my verse is a torturous ploy
and if you ever held my mic it'd make your shoulders disjoint
good concept, bad worded this bar, but still a good one
so don't disappoint, we all know you won't win in this fight
cuz i'ma psychic's best friend... bringing predictions to life
nop. didnt feel dis one. not punchy at all, and "a psychic's best friend" ...
i rhyme away, my mind displays an endless fountain of punches
while you're breakin ya bank and it's still amountin to nothing
no punch again, but this time the concept aint dat bad, and got some points on creativity

no multis, jah, some problems wording thr structure of ya bar, even a coke head can say ya done did better. let's c wat the other nigga brings...



this dudes a bitch, caught feelings n cried cuz his anthem
my wins expected, lyke this rich wyte boy drivin a phantom (he calls me rich wyte boi)
oh no! another puch explainer... u'll loose points for dat.. and this shit wasnt definitely punchy, really bad drivin a phantom... i'd really get offended wit dat...
im ya slaughter house .. its kew so i crave for the beef
the # of letters in ya name is luck, but i leave 7 daized cuz ya weak (days/week)
haha. ha. eh. ok it was a good wordplay
the fuck does text prove? throw a mic on ya wish list
u rippin my presence is unlykly lyke a jewish boy on christmas (presents)
hehe, wen not doin great simply bring any issue on the jews... but ok again some interesting wordplay
if u handin out beatins ill cripple ya whole rations
ull never beat me n this aint jus a bold statment
lol, this one was well done
RGF vending machine .. watch as i serve jah for 50 cent
u gay stripper, u spent more tyme dancin wit biggies than diddy did (hard dicks lol)
nope. biggie deserved better in this one
lookin at ya verse nothins tyte, nope notta rhyme
w/e we do ya cant see me .. n it so happens its the bottum line
Good closer. ok let's see...

ur shit wasnt dat great imo... you had some sparkls, tryed to do some wordplay and some did good other not as much, no multis, a lil personal in da begginin.. got the "bold statement deal" and the closer as strongpoints..

jah would have a consistent drop if it wasnt for the bad structuring deal, too many words in some lines losin flow, i felt it was like a lil something for the sufix guy to shut up... the thing is he didnt, he worked hard imo and got a couple of good bars, the sparkle takes another one...
EDIT: but yo sufix you really gotta stop explainin your shit a punch is a punch, u got a moment to hit the other guy... cant really go out n explain niggaz wasup...

sufixx gmv

[ruivirtual]

n yall can go vote on my battle
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