Checka Fred vs. Wreck

[Checka Fred]

House Rules
10 Lines
Due Whenever Ur Ready

I'll drop in a min....

[Wreck]

yea me 2 man, consider this my checkin

[Wreck]

its cool that you IMed me, but in storytelling you behind me
as far as talent, you need practice like Allen, and your fat momma told me your dick was tiny
no gay shit, i just have to say this, you the clay aiken of game boards
cause i put the blood red in his checker game, get the fuck outa here and leave your room key outside the main door
fred's a clown like krusty, you aint been battlin in ten years, you rusty
so if John Gruden's the mascot for horror movies, Fred's the bitch for Chucky
this ridiculous rookie i stumbled on, you the bug caught stuck in the dog shit
Fred flying high only to crash with planes in 911, no panther has ever been ballin


last line- panther= carolina panthers, fred's from nc

ask if any lines otherwise need to be explained


g/l Fred

[Checka Fred]

...first off, I wanna know, just who is he?...
...I guess it's time to 'smash bros.' like 'luigi'...
...you seen this kid spit? it's HORRIBLE how dude raps...
...so now i gotta 'train wreck' and put 'em on 'track'...
...but not mine, you ain't crashin my style...
...so fall back like the spirit made you lay in the aisle...
...yo i'm the best, so you really better lay back...
...you only half of me...how you livin clearly states that!...*
...you told me you won't at ya best, that was real, yeh...
...but i 'caught yo ass slippin'... and you still 'fell'/fail!...

*His location got his battle record in it, which is 10-10

[Wreck]

alright VOTES, break down verses

[Wreck]

votes

[G-Rated]

Originally Posted by Wreck

its cool that you IMed me, but in storytelling you behind me
as far as talent, you need practice like Allen, and your fat momma told me your dick was tiny
Bad opener...No punch, Setup started out good, but your follow up line was complete filler, no creativity...
no gay shit, i just have to say this, you the clay aiken of game boards
cause i put the blood red in his checker game, get the fuck outa here and leave your room key outside the main door
I see the connection, but there's no punch in this...
fred's a clown like krusty, you aint been battlin in ten years, you rusty
so if John Gruden's the mascot for horror movies, Fred's the bitch for Chucky
Decent...
this ridiculous rookie i stumbled on, you the bug caught stuck in the dog shit
Fred flying high only to crash with planes in 911, no panther has ever been ballin
Bad closer...Could have did more with his location IMO

Originally Posted by Checka Fred

...first off, I wanna know, just who is he?...
...I guess it's time to 'smash bros.' like 'luigi'...
Okay opener...I've seen the 'luigi' concepts but never with that wordplay...
...you seen this kid spit? it's HORRIBLE how dude raps...
...so now i gotta 'train wreck' and put 'em on 'track'...
Decent nameplay...Could have expanded this idea more tho, but pretty good...
...but not mine, you ain't crashin my style...
...so fall back like the spirit made you lay in the aisle...
Not really a punch...
...yo i'm the best, so you really better lay back...
...you only half of me...how you livin clearly states that!...*

...you told me you won't at ya best, that was real, yeh...
...but i 'caught yo ass slippin'... and you still 'fell'/fail!...
Bad closer...Played concept...

Wreck constructed his verse pretty well considering his material, but failed to capitalize on making a punch out of his concepts...Flow was off a bit in some bars too...Checka Fred had the overall better verse with punches and that one nameplay on Wreck...Nice flow as well, but his concepts need to be developed more...

My Vote: Checka Fred

[Wreck]

thanks for the vote rated, yea its all good, its not my forte but i tried lol, uppin for more votes please, 1-0 checka fred, lets get it

[Wreck]

propped ya btw rated, more votes please

[Jah Wise]

Wreck
its cool that you IMed me, but in storytelling you behind me
as far as talent, you need practice like Allen, and your fat momma told me your dick was tiny
weak opener
no gay shit, i just have to say this, you the clay aiken of game boards
cause i put the blood red in his checker game, get the fuck outa here and leave your room key outside the main door
ight
fred's a clown like krusty, you aint been battlin in ten years, you rusty
so if John Gruden's the mascot for horror movies, Fred's the bitch for Chucky
good multis
this ridiculous rookie i stumbled on, you the bug caught stuck in the dog shit
Fred flying high only to crash with planes in 911, no panther has ever been ballin
ok closer

Checka Fred
...first off, I wanna know, just who is he?...
...I guess it's time to 'smash bros.' like 'luigi'...
nice opener
...you seen this kid spit? it's HORRIBLE how dude raps...
...so now i gotta 'train wreck' and put 'em on 'track'...
lol good
...but not mine, you ain't crashin my style...
...so fall back like the spirit made you lay in the aisle...
ight
...yo i'm the best, so you really better lay back...
...you only half of me...how you livin clearly states that!...*
god damn, dope
...you told me you won't at ya best, that was real, yeh...
...but i 'caught yo ass slippin'... and you still 'fell'/fail!...
kinda played

Wreck's verse was disappointing and really didn't have any substance. Checka Fred's verse was better overall and had everything that Wreck's lacked.
Checka Fred GMV