Ranked:¤Glõ8ÂL¤ Vs. Da Birthday Boy

[In$anity]

Originally Posted by ¤Glõ8ÂL¤

somebodys gotta drop first...

Admit, U been straight wanna being to become something since the day of burf/
Fuck it! u suck at writing, lack of respect, maybe u’ll just reach ‘papa smurf’//
was aiight, not a good flow though

just because you don’t like how this sounds, you gotta act like my ‘sister act’/
stop whining and crying, already got a choir of my own bitches round-back//
multi, not a hard hitter but multi non the less

trying to be something as big as the sea? Wavy flow can make people sea sick/
and all the puke ‘swallowed by the sea’ gives u the great shit-load to deal wit//
not feelin this man

see, people do donate left-overs, while u collect the aluminum covering,worth more than u got/
but forgot to put your loaf of beef in the freezer and your side of this feud just rot//
was aiight, not hard hitting

Now, Trying to let frustration out, you keep punchin on your lines wit fists/
Dumb ass, no wonder your rhymes never took affect nor made sense, since!//
better punch

Originally Posted by Da Birthday Boy

Your rhymes so bad you known every where thats why they call you global.
Only won one award in your life and thats a piece prize for bein least noble.
aiight, just an opener

You tryin to come up like Papoose and do your thing underground.
This site rap god fathers you still listenin to music NOW.
not feelin it

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you
was aiight

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast
not a bad punch

You act like you known global but the truth is its only negative
Talkin like you big all of a sudden you i question where ur street credit is?
iight not great homie but i get u

Advice:

Glõ8ÂL - you need to work on flow n get some more punchlines in.

Da Birthday Boy - you need to work on punchlines, flow was aiight, but the punches let you down. Try n make the bars a similar length too.

Final Vote: Glõ8ÂL

(Even though he voted against me in my battle and my punches were off the hook, but still)

Good one guys, stay up

[GLO]

I thought for a moment i totaly lost ur vote...but i guess i was wrong...
thanx for it...I really appreciate it G!
2-1 me
//holla

[In$anity]

naw it's aiight homie, props to you. Good luck in the battle you two

[Wreck]

global

Admit, U been straight wanna being to become something since the day of burf/
Fuck it! u suck at writing, lack of respect, maybe u’ll just reach ‘papa smurf’//

first line seemed stretched, i like the second line tho


just because you don’t like how this sounds, you gotta act like my ‘sister act’/
stop whining and crying, already got a choir of my own bitches round-back//

eh ok seemed to not flow alil bit


trying to be something as big as the sea? Wavy flow can make people sea sick/
and all the puke ‘swallowed by the sea’ gives u the great shit-load to deal wit//

eh again, i understand ur concept and the idea of it, it just seems like its goin round and round, not straightforward

see, people do donate left-overs, while u collect the aluminum covering,worth more than u got/
but forgot to put your loaf of beef in the freezer and your side of this feud just rot//

not bad, another good concept understood

Now, Trying to let frustration out, you keep punchin on your lines wit fists/
Dumb ass, no wonder your rhymes never took affect nor made sense, since!//

seems choppy again man, make the ending more solid, like u wanna take him and just crush the shit outa him


vs



dbb

Your rhymes so bad you known every where thats why they call you global.
Only won one award in your life and thats a piece prize for bein least noble.

not bad opener

You tryin to come up like Papoose and do your thing underground.
This site rap god fathers you still listenin to music NOW.

this bar makes no sense, second part, u still listen to music now? i dont understand, not bad tho, clear and straightforward

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you

eh kind of corny, choppy alil bit too

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast.

once again i get ur concept, came out the wrong way tho

You act like you known global but the truth is its only negative
Talkin like you big all of a sudden you i question where ur street credit is?

ur best bar, pretty good


overall, to be honest both of yall need 2 work on puttin more in ur verses to fill em up, not filler but it needs to fit, global, u had alot of filler and u beat around the bush instead of getting right @ dbb more it seemed like, dbb u had understandable concepts but some of the bars were choppy and u used some of the concepts the same, i.e. papoose

overall, because of his last bar, ima have to go with dbb barely, this was a close battle tho

my vote: dbb

any other battles needed to be voted on, holla @ wreck, peace homies

[Ghost]

global got it easy, better punches...

birthday fucked up here

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast.

[GLO]

Originally Posted by Ghost-Ex

global got it easy, better punches...

birthday fucked up here

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast.

I guess that votes for me...
if dbb counts this as a vote too...
its 3-2 for me....uppin for votes

[kilenm]

Admit, U been straight wanna being to become something since the day of burf/
Fuck it! u suck at writing, lack of respect, maybe u’ll just reach ‘papa smurf’//
aite punch, the bar is stretched a lil, and doesnt flow the best

just because you don’t like how this sounds, you gotta act like my ‘sister act’/
stop whining and crying, already got a choir of my own bitches round-back//
bad delivery, try to use different words, said act twice, kills the flow to me, a little choppy

trying to be something as big as the sea? Wavy flow can make people sea sick/
and all the puke ‘swallowed by the sea’ gives u the great shit-load to deal wit//
ehhh, again said sea three times, bar is to strecthed to just rhyme sick and wit

see, people do donate left-overs, while u collect the aluminum covering,worth more than u got/
but forgot to put your loaf of beef in the freezer and your side of this feud just rot//
work on the delivery, decent multi, coulda been doper if worded better

Now, Trying to let frustration out, you keep punchin on your lines wit fists/
Dumb ass, no wonder your rhymes never took affect nor made sense, since!//
aite punch






Da Birthday Boy
Your rhymes so bad you known every where thats why they call you global.
Only won one award in your life and thats a piece prize for bein least noble.
coulda been worded better, aite opener

You tryin to come up like Papoose and do your thing underground.
This site rap god fathers you still listenin to music NOW.
lol, i dont understand this at al, underground and now dont really rhyme

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you
coulda worded the second line better, so it flowed but aite punch

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast
lol aite punch

You act like you known global but the truth is its only negative
Talkin like you big all of a sudden you i question where ur street credit is?
i liked this closer nice

vote:birthday boy, for better overall structure,flow,and punches

[Aril Problym]

Originally Posted by ¤Glõ8ÂL¤

somebodys gotta drop first...

Admit, U been straight wanna being to become something since the day of burf/
Fuck it! u suck at writing, lack of respect, maybe u’ll just reach ‘papa smurf’//

just because you don’t like how this sounds, you gotta act like my ‘sister act’/
stop whining and crying, already got a choir of my own bitches round-back//

trying to be something as big as the sea? Wavy flow can make people sea sick/
and all the puke ‘swallowed by the sea’ gives u the great shit-load to deal wit//

see, people do donate left-overs, while u collect the aluminum covering,worth more than u got/
but forgot to put your loaf of beef in the freezer and your side of this feud just rot//

Now, Trying to let frustration out, you keep punchin on your lines wit fists/
Dumb ass, no wonder your rhymes never took affect nor made sense, since!//

Ummmm overall was hard to follow...lacked flow,multis and lyricism!

Da Birthday Boy
Your rhymes so bad you known every where thats why they call you global.
Only won one award in your life and thats a piece prize for bein least noble.

You tryin to come up like Papoose and do your thing underground.
This site rap god fathers you still listenin to music NOW.

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast.

You act like you known global but the truth is its only negative
Talkin like you big all of a sudden you i question where ur street credit is?

Once again..hard to follow...weak format and nothing hit hard...This was a weak battle. I vote on whos verse was more entertaining...well both verses were weak. So what shall I do?.. Birthday had a better verse IMO


Yall both need to work on ya lyricism,creativeness and multis!

[Prycele$$]

hmm..
Iunt really feel like breakin shit down really.. but..

Global got this, his punches came more consistant.. and it seems like DBB just threw random shit out there (IE. second bar)
yall both need work on ya flow..
but anyway

vote: Global..

[G-Rated]

Admit, U been straight wanna being to become something since the day of burf/
Fuck it! u suck at writing, lack of respect, maybe u’ll just reach ‘papa smurf’//

just because you don’t like how this sounds, you gotta act like my ‘sister act’/
stop whining and crying, already got a choir of my own bitches round-back//

trying to be something as big as the sea? Wavy flow can make people sea sick/
and all the puke ‘swallowed by the sea’ gives u the great shit-load to deal wit//

see, people do donate left-overs, while u collect the aluminum covering,worth more than u got/
but forgot to put your loaf of beef in the freezer and your side of this feud just rot//

Now, Trying to let frustration out, you keep punchin on your lines wit fists/
Dumb ass, no wonder your rhymes never took affect nor made sense, since!//

Your lines are too stretched!! In order to make these type of lines work you HAVE to have multies, if not, you will have no flow...Maybe try doing 3-liners, if you feel the need to be so wordy, but use multies to create a break, you should also try extracting all the extra words that are causing your lines to drag on...You also lacked punches and alot of the wordplay that you went for was too forced and did not connect...Be more creative with your setups, they should set-up your 2nd line...There has to be some kind of connection there...

Your rhymes so bad you known every where thats why they call you global.
Only won one award in your life and thats a piece prize for bein least noble.

You tryin to come up like Papoose and do your thing underground.
This site rap god fathers you still listenin to music NOW.

You the reason the New York is dying dont compare yourself to Papoose.
Fuck what Akon says not smack that you so bad bitch I should smack you

You not from NY you say global so probaly frech is what you chose.
Call me Aunt Jemima cuz i burn your ass n turn u into french toast.

You act like you known global but the truth is its only negative
Talkin like you big all of a sudden you i question where ur street credit is?

What is up with the periods? Anywayz, your verse was hard to understand, weak flow, random content and you need to have better word choice...Alot of your content is like a language of its own, there's no substance to most of it! Work on your punches and wordplay...Bring a more lyrical forefront to your verse and also try to incorporate multies...

This is hard...Both lacked the relevant things needed to win a battle...No lyricism, no solid punches...No connections, weak flow...Bad word choice...

I dont know who to vote for...I cant find an edge that either of you had to take this battle...Sorry...Rematch?