We Gone

[AeroFX]

bitches runnin they mouth,
talkin on things they dont know about,
i'll slaughter you before you shift from the couch,
to the door, grab my blade, pin you to the floor,
whats wrong, you dont want it no more,

you cant be accused of biting,
your mind focused on cock sucking,
just like your writing,
i aint frightened,
change your avatar to the rainbow motif,
stop the e-beef, get your facts straight,
okay chief?,
its you not fucking with me, us,
whatever because, we handled you,
your now history,
learn to keep your mouth clean,
mr aka dont mention,
lyrical lysterine,
the heat i bring got your ears blistering,
your punches weak, boring,
*crickets* no ones listening,
i'm tired of your constant bullshit, i'm snoring,
haters come and go we ignore em,
while they stay till 4 in the morning,
hopin they bitch ass can respond,
...i'm gone...i'm gone..

[DXavier23]

not bad man. i could follow your structure but i feel like it could be easily confused by some. Work on using a little bad vocab, which will aid your flow. Stay up tho

-If you dont mind, hit me with some feed on my new drop.

[Lucuss]

Hmm I thought this was alright... I could follow the structure but wasn't overly impressed by the flow thought that if there was a beat there would have to be a contradiction in the speed of the lines being spat in order to fit it all in on the beat... I also thought that the vocabulary, imagery and ideas used were basic. This piece could be a lot better, you just have to try and approach it from a smarter, more intellectual basis. Anyway nice to see you putting up your work, keep practicing and improving, peace.