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07-23-2008, 01:10 AM
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Nothing But Dust
I am the messiah/
a writer with a higher/ calling/ I'm the ignita/ I'm the fuel to your fire/ I'm the skip in your step/ I'm the bullets in your tech/ I'm the ink in the pen/ I'm the alpha, the omega/ I'm the danger/ I'm the warning/ atom splitting/ I am forming/ it's storming/ importing the aliens/ I'm the raft on which they float/ I'm the courage in which they hope/ I'm the shores in which they dream/ I'm the plan in the gangstas scheme/ I'm locked in a cell/ I'm trapped inside of hell/ I'm the wish to go to heaven/ I'm the committer of the seven/ I'm the reverend/ I'm the demon/ I am everything you want/ everything you need/ i am greed/ I am lust/ I am love/ I am nothing but dust/
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07-23-2008, 10:17 AM
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Rap GodFather
Join Date: Mar 2006
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man im feelin this joint ...its like that nas is like shyt.....the concept was hot ill holla
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07-23-2008, 03:09 PM
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thanks as always tyme
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07-23-2008, 11:57 PM
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This wasn't a bad piece had some imagery here and there... had a decent flow.. And structure was good... wish it was longer though lol... and u executed the concept well had a good beginning and end fam... this was a nice drop 8/10 keep writing
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The sky keeps turning and mocking, and this pain is 'presumption' Why I hear my most personal news from the gurl my nigga 'fucking' But the lies in turn are nothing, but what I'm feeling is just 'bare' Cause the end of my time, Beanie said it best I can feel it in the 'air' |
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07-27-2008, 01:46 AM
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Underboss
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yeah flow is something i definitly feel I need A LOT of work at. I just don't know how to write "flow"
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07-27-2008, 09:40 AM
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Rap GodFather
Join Date: Mar 2006
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Shift everybody has a flow...it may be either fast or slow...take speech class for example....u talk about it through out right?...spoken word dude?...lol
just grab a mic and a instrumental ...feel the beat first before it drops...sometimes maybe a beat will pop up in your head...hey it happens!....nod ya head a lil bit...make that beat come in tune through ya cranium and spit how u may think it would sound like...as if it were a song...listen to the beat from beginning to end for u spit though....keep listening til u grasp a flow....u'll know when u do.
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07-27-2008, 07:13 PM
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Don
Join Date: Nov 2006
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I am the messiah/
a writer with a higher/ calling/ I'm the ignita/ I'm the fuel to your fire/ I'm the skip in your step/ I'm the bullets in your tech/ I'm the ink in the pen/ -Sick flow. Like the concept. I'm the wish to go to heaven/ I'm the committer of the seven/ I'm the reverend/ I'm the demon/ I am everything you want/ everything you need/ i am greed/ I am lust/ I am love/ I am nothing but dust/ -Another awesome part. This whole joint is on-point. Fun to read, good flow, and creative. Nice job fam
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but what about Grind House and Kill Bill what about Cheney and Halliburton the back door deals on oil fields How is Nas the most violent person |
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