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Jfly16 · 06-02-2006, 03:37 AM

juz wrote sumtin watchin fight klub aont juz wanted 2 spit

I clap the 9 and graze ya dome
while I'm smokin a black like Krazy Bone
when we get in the ring u don't phaze me homes
The kid back so it ain't safe again
Jeezy say damnnnn and Juelz say ay 4 him
They say my flow resemble hell so preist gotta pray for him
I have u fightin for freedom like King and X
except i do it over text

Aril Problym · 06-02-2006, 02:26 PM

this was aight. Nice flow and multis but let me point out a few things for you that I think you could did better with.

I clap the 9 and graze ya dome
{Is your aim off? If you clap the nine you should be able to splatter his shits}

Jeezy say damnnnn and Juelz say ay 4 him
{Its a little hard to read when you use numbers instead of the word. I'm pretty sure you know how to spell "for"}

Overall I think you could've did better but I think you was just messing around.

Jfly16 · 06-03-2006, 12:21 AM

yea iwaz but thanx for the tips

$Murph$ · 06-03-2006, 01:12 AM

nice shit

Jae [Rock] · 06-04-2006, 02:26 PM

Its Was Okay I Guess

06-02-2006, 03:37 AM	#1 (permalink)
Jfly16 Underboss Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Da Dirty Glove Posts: 1,080	Nyce free juz wrote sumtin watchin fight klub aont juz wanted 2 spit I clap the 9 and graze ya dome while I'm smokin a black like Krazy Bone when we get in the ring u don't phaze me homes The kid back so it ain't safe again Jeezy say damnnnn and Juelz say ay 4 him They say my flow resemble hell so preist gotta pray for him I have u fightin for freedom like King and X except i do it over text __________________

06-02-2006, 02:26 PM	#2 (permalink)
Aril Problym Untouchable Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: I'm a Ny dude allday. Bx,Bk,L.I but I reside in the 412 right now!! Posts: 3,621	this was aight. Nice flow and multis but let me point out a few things for you that I think you could did better with. I clap the 9 and graze ya dome {Is your aim off? If you clap the nine you should be able to splatter his shits} Jeezy say damnnnn and Juelz say ay 4 him {Its a little hard to read when you use numbers instead of the word. I'm pretty sure you know how to spell "for"} Overall I think you could've did better but I think you was just messing around. __________________ Before you mention me remember: I got unsettled rage,google maps and yellow pages No patience and several cases in several places I break bones like I break promises to do audio I'm sorry yo...no I'm not!!Stop sweating me like cardio-The Problym Mayne

06-03-2006, 12:21 AM	#3 (permalink)
Jfly16 Underboss Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Da Dirty Glove Posts: 1,080	yea iwaz but thanx for the tips __________________

06-03-2006, 01:12 AM	#4 (permalink)
$Murph$ Rookie Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 38	nice shit __________________ TrapStarzCommunity^^click

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06-04-2006, 02:26 PM	#5 (permalink)
Jae [Rock] Rookie Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 2	Its Was Okay I Guess