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MikeGame · 01-04-2008, 03:59 PM

Yo its ya boy Mike Game, been appreciating all the feedback Ive been gettin as of late. But I need yal on this one. Its a track called "Dont Know" from my groups cd "Members Only". We got a show coming up, and they stressed that we have club friendly material. And I wont front, I hate doin club tracks. But heres my attempt, let me know what yal think. And yes, I did boast part of the hook from 50 Cent, only shit I could think of to this beat.

dont know.mp3 - 3.54MB

And some feedback Ive left:
Can I Live & Holla at Me

Aien - Almost Over

**G-Rated** · 01-04-2008, 08:58 PM

not feelin tha beat.. flow/delivery aint good on this joint, everything seems forced... hook aint catchy enuff for a club joint IMO & its too wordy in places kuz you rushin ya delivery here n there...

krayzplaya · 01-05-2008, 12:51 AM

ill write while i listen
the beat is aight could be club
the hook is off
flow is aight needs more feelin/fillers bars seem short
need better ad libs
keep workin at it, this could be a hot joint

i say u switch the hook up to be more female oriented
i.e. "make it work girl, let me see you move" or some shit like that

brooklyn1 · 01-05-2008, 07:40 AM

yeah they right. u need to work on your delivery, flow, and vocal presence... the beat its cool, but it seems like its missing something...

keep doin wat u do...

bk1

maniak · 01-05-2008, 10:16 AM

yeah beat cool, but flow and delivery is off homie, and chorus too but work on it and u'll get it

01-04-2008, 03:59 PM	#1 (permalink)
MikeGame Gangster Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 351	New Club Track "Dont Know" by Mike Game Yo its ya boy Mike Game, been appreciating all the feedback Ive been gettin as of late. But I need yal on this one. Its a track called "Dont Know" from my groups cd "Members Only". We got a show coming up, and they stressed that we have club friendly material. And I wont front, I hate doin club tracks. But heres my attempt, let me know what yal think. And yes, I did boast part of the hook from 50 Cent, only shit I could think of to this beat. dont know.mp3 - 3.54MB And some feedback Ive left: Can I Live & Holla at Me Aien - Almost Over __________________ Mike Game + JDaKidd = The Reason You Rap

01-05-2008, 12:51 AM	#3 (permalink)
krayzplaya Capo Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Down South Texas Made Posts: 647	ill write while i listen the beat is aight could be club the hook is off flow is aight needs more feelin/fillers bars seem short need better ad libs keep workin at it, this could be a hot joint i say u switch the hook up to be more female oriented i.e. "make it work girl, let me see you move" or some shit like that __________________ Http://www.myspace.com/countdownclique more then a group we a family -R3D

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01-04-2008, 08:58 PM	#2 (permalink)
G-Rated RGFMod Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: ★☆ Texas ☆★ Posts: 7,734	not feelin tha beat.. flow/delivery aint good on this joint, everything seems forced... hook aint catchy enuff for a club joint IMO & its too wordy in places kuz you rushin ya delivery here n there...

01-05-2008, 07:40 AM	#4 (permalink)
brooklyn1 Gangster Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 399	yeah they right. u need to work on your delivery, flow, and vocal presence... the beat its cool, but it seems like its missing something... keep doin wat u do... bk1