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illerrre · 02-05-2008, 01:34 PM

I'm 19, Swedish and this is my second audio ever. Could need some feedback!!

SoundClick artist: illerill - page with MP3 music downloads

If the song plays really slow, download it and play it. Dunno what's wrong but it plays really slow on my computer if i play it from soundclick.

links:
Why Life Happens-new track
Silent187 - So in Love

I'm on the brink of a... total mental breakdown
Vocal over instrumentals help to get the pain down
But it stays around every day's a day in the same town
In the same fucking country ruled by these strange clowns
And every sunrise... have me reminded
How I'm paying for the governments lies how we're blinded
and feeded with it like pidgeons eatin' whitebread
it's widespread like a disease in every human eye
Humanize! lean your head and view the skies
Through the gloomy clouds hanging loose in heaven
and then observe the truth that hides there, behind the lies
That's been told by the devil, we've all been brainwashed
And bruised inside, and if we're breaking the law (yeah?)
Them fuckers can't blame us, cuz both you and I
Are mindless fucking creatures livin' useless lives and
If I didn't fight for the right I'd jump off a roof and die

Fuck the government the regime fuck the people in charge
Fuck the radio the tv, betta keep up your guard
And stay away from the danger that media draws
Propaganda's meltin' our brains, eatin' our hearts

Presentations of fucked up information, misleadin' media
Covered by the govern and other corrupt corporations
What does it mean ta ya? huh where's your frustration?
A fake encyclopedia, it's war, where is our savior?
How much pride are you willin' to give up for a nation
That's unwillin' to give explenations for their behavior?
How long will we continue to adapt to what fits them?
Stroll the earth strapped in chains, trapped in this system? (listen)
System in our sections been critically wounded
People need protection, politically pounded
From the white house, to the swedish city hall
To change this shit right now begin thinkin' critical
Politicans aint here to make the best for you (naah)
They just here for reign, rule another four days months, years
So son hear what they will or wont let you do
Is only decided by which shit gets them more payed

Fuck the government the regime fuck the people in charge
Fuck the radio the tv, betta keep up your guard
And stay away from the danger that media draws
Propaganda's meltin' our brains, eatin' our hearts

Every minute every hour he's increasing his powers
The devil of a nation, decievein' the cowards
Puttin' lives at risk like a meteor shower
I survive in the midst of the chaos devoured
By hatred and them fucks wantin' to slay us
With the brainwashed people they empowered to jail us
They betrayed us and now the residents bleed
Unaware but they're damage, believe a president's speech
Who's readin' quotes on a note just fishin' for votes
I'd fold my fucking piece to a knife 'n' slith of his throat
For what they said 'n' wrote, twisted sick shit
I'm spittin' hiphop and people listen to this but
Missin' the fuckin' message like they don't bother
And every fuckin' day is much worse than the other
Mothers sisters fathers and brothers, visitin' gift shops
Buying the propaganda on shirts for six bucks

Fuck the government the regime fuck the people in charge
Fuck the radio the tv, betta keep up your guard
And stay away from the danger that media draws
Propaganda's meltin' our brains, eatin' our hearts

**G-Rated** · 02-05-2008, 02:03 PM

lyrically, this was sick.. fa real--this was on sum logical/political shit.. i like that, str8 from tha heart type lyrics.. i luv tha hook!! but throughout your verse, your rhyme scheme knocks you off beat here n there.. but ya emotions are present, delivery was kool, flow could be better though... you should add sum adlibs to the hook .. it sounds too much like the verse.. but like i said its still hott... you might wanna re-record this tho.. its nice rite now but i think it could be polished up a bit as far as your verses go & to clean up ya flow a bit to make it more of an instant hit.. nonetheless, dope shit

illerrre · 02-07-2008, 11:28 AM

My mic isn't that bad... I think? ADK-51, cost me 150$. I think the problem is the mixing. I'd problems configuring my mixingboard. I'll respit and remix this in a couple of days.

illerrre · 02-10-2008, 01:22 PM

Respit it. Hope it got a little better.

SoundClick artist: illerill - page with MP3 music downloads

02-05-2008, 01:34 PM	#1 (permalink)
illerrre Rookie Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 48	Propaganda! Need feedback I'm 19, Swedish and this is my second audio ever. Could need some feedback!! SoundClick artist: illerill - page with MP3 music downloads If the song plays really slow, download it and play it. Dunno what's wrong but it plays really slow on my computer if i play it from soundclick. links: Why Life Happens-new track Silent187 - So in Love I'm on the brink of a... total mental breakdown Vocal over instrumentals help to get the pain down But it stays around every day's a day in the same town In the same fucking country ruled by these strange clowns And every sunrise... have me reminded How I'm paying for the governments lies how we're blinded and feeded with it like pidgeons eatin' whitebread it's widespread like a disease in every human eye Humanize! lean your head and view the skies Through the gloomy clouds hanging loose in heaven and then observe the truth that hides there, behind the lies That's been told by the devil, we've all been brainwashed And bruised inside, and if we're breaking the law (yeah?) Them fuckers can't blame us, cuz both you and I Are mindless fucking creatures livin' useless lives and If I didn't fight for the right I'd jump off a roof and die Fuck the government the regime fuck the people in charge Fuck the radio the tv, betta keep up your guard And stay away from the danger that media draws Propaganda's meltin' our brains, eatin' our hearts Presentations of fucked up information, misleadin' media Covered by the govern and other corrupt corporations What does it mean ta ya? huh where's your frustration? A fake encyclopedia, it's war, where is our savior? How much pride are you willin' to give up for a nation That's unwillin' to give explenations for their behavior? How long will we continue to adapt to what fits them? Stroll the earth strapped in chains, trapped in this system? (listen) System in our sections been critically wounded People need protection, politically pounded From the white house, to the swedish city hall To change this shit right now begin thinkin' critical Politicans aint here to make the best for you (naah) They just here for reign, rule another four days months, years So son hear what they will or wont let you do Is only decided by which shit gets them more payed Fuck the government the regime fuck the people in charge Fuck the radio the tv, betta keep up your guard And stay away from the danger that media draws Propaganda's meltin' our brains, eatin' our hearts Every minute every hour he's increasing his powers The devil of a nation, decievein' the cowards Puttin' lives at risk like a meteor shower I survive in the midst of the chaos devoured By hatred and them fucks wantin' to slay us With the brainwashed people they empowered to jail us They betrayed us and now the residents bleed Unaware but they're damage, believe a president's speech Who's readin' quotes on a note just fishin' for votes I'd fold my fucking piece to a knife 'n' slith of his throat For what they said 'n' wrote, twisted sick shit I'm spittin' hiphop and people listen to this but Missin' the fuckin' message like they don't bother And every fuckin' day is much worse than the other Mothers sisters fathers and brothers, visitin' gift shops Buying the propaganda on shirts for six bucks Fuck the government the regime fuck the people in charge Fuck the radio the tv, betta keep up your guard And stay away from the danger that media draws Propaganda's meltin' our brains, eatin' our hearts Last edited by illerrre; 02-05-2008 at 01:49 PM..

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02-05-2008, 02:03 PM	#2 (permalink)
G-Rated RGFMod Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: ★☆ Texas ☆★ Posts: 7,721	lyrically, this was sick.. fa real--this was on sum logical/political shit.. i like that, str8 from tha heart type lyrics.. i luv tha hook!! but throughout your verse, your rhyme scheme knocks you off beat here n there.. but ya emotions are present, delivery was kool, flow could be better though... you should add sum adlibs to the hook .. it sounds too much like the verse.. but like i said its still hott... you might wanna re-record this tho.. its nice rite now but i think it could be polished up a bit as far as your verses go & to clean up ya flow a bit to make it more of an instant hit.. nonetheless, dope shit

02-07-2008, 11:28 AM	#3 (permalink)
illerrre Rookie Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 48	My mic isn't that bad... I think? ADK-51, cost me 150$. I think the problem is the mixing. I'd problems configuring my mixingboard. I'll respit and remix this in a couple of days.

02-10-2008, 01:22 PM	#4 (permalink)
illerrre Rookie Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 48	Respit it. Hope it got a little better. SoundClick artist: illerill - page with MP3 music downloads