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w_e_z11 · 06-30-2008, 10:48 PM

It has another artists name (mentioned at the start) I was going to collab with him but he cannot record atm. But I'll cut that out. So have a listen:

http://www.zshare.net/audio/14484358a64335b5/

So if you are interested in this, PM me and link me to some of your music.

Revalation · 07-04-2008, 08:12 PM

I like your voice but the flow sounds odd on this, it's not going on it smooth. It sounds like you wrote this to a different beat and had to restructure it to spit it on this beat. Delivery is aight, could use more energy in my opinion cause you got the voice and potential to really hit them in the head with shit. Lyrics were straight, few decent lines in there, I like that "grind" line. Chorus, I think might have work but it's not really sticking with the melody feel me. Just giving real constructive criticism, so hopefully you appreciate it.

Check out my new joint and return the love...

Revalation · 07-13-2008, 11:37 PM

Return the favor...
2 new tracks - ft. Grime & Termanology!!!!

06-30-2008, 10:48 PM	#1 (permalink)
w_e_z11 Criminal Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 76	Vision - Roamer (Two free verses) It has another artists name (mentioned at the start) I was going to collab with him but he cannot record atm. But I'll cut that out. So have a listen: http://www.zshare.net/audio/14484358a64335b5/ So if you are interested in this, PM me and link me to some of your music. __________________

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07-04-2008, 08:12 PM	#2 (permalink)
Revalation Criminal Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 78	I like your voice but the flow sounds odd on this, it's not going on it smooth. It sounds like you wrote this to a different beat and had to restructure it to spit it on this beat. Delivery is aight, could use more energy in my opinion cause you got the voice and potential to really hit them in the head with shit. Lyrics were straight, few decent lines in there, I like that "grind" line. Chorus, I think might have work but it's not really sticking with the melody feel me. Just giving real constructive criticism, so hopefully you appreciate it. Check out my new joint and return the love...

07-13-2008, 11:37 PM	#3 (permalink)
Revalation Criminal Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 78	Return the favor... 2 new tracks - ft. Grime & Termanology!!!!